Beloved One

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Beloved One
by Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez
08-Nov-2009
 

It was a dark and dreary night. It was as if the moon had disappeared. What a wretched night indeed. Even though others surrounded her, she felt all alone. Totally left out in the cold.

“What have I done to deserve this wretched fate?” She wondered to herself.

If she could have shed another tear, she would have. Several months before she had been in an accident not of her own making and had lost the ability to weep.

“My only crime was to serve my people well. I did not ask to be created. I was not given a choice in whom to serve.” She sighed even more deeply.

Her mind wandered to happier days. “I still remember the day the two young women came and from all the rest selected me.”

As she thought of the past, a feeling of warmth came over her. “The first woman was very kind and made sure that no harm came to me. I then passed on to the second woman and things were good for me for several years.”

As she continued to reflect on the past, a cold feeling came over her that made her shiver. “I still don’t know why she handed me to him. Did I do something wrong? I did my best to serve her. He did not care as well for me as she did.”

She then felt as if death was standing by her side as she thought of him. “Just when I thought things could not get worse for me, they did. Did she want me dead when she handed me to him? It was as if he was ready to die along with me.”

Just at that very moment, it began to rain. It was as if the sky was weeping for her plight. She could feel the mud beneath her. She was miserable and longed for better times.

“He never cared for me. I meant nothing to him. Where will my fate end?” Just then, she heard a sound in the distance. It had stopped raining in that very instant.

She said to herself, “Could it be? Is it possible? Yes, I think that it is she.” She felt a warmth return to her. From a distance, she could see the familiar silhouette of the woman that she longed to see.

Once the woman got close enough one could hear her say “My beloved one, please forgive me. I only gave you to him because I knew that you would keep him safe. If I had known that he would harm you and this would be your fate. I would have never given you to him.”

You could see the tears in her owner’s eyes as she checked her body for damage. “Well, it seems that you were not harmed beyond repair. You will see, I will restore you to your former glory. You will be a gorgeous Forest Green again and I will get you some better headlights. ”

Her owner got in the car and whispered to her. “I promise you that I will never give you back to him again. He does not deserve you, my precious one. Now let us go home.”

She slowly drove her safely home. Slowly, the process to restore her was begun. The Mustang thought, “She never hated me. It was because she trusted me that I was given to her beloved son.” The Mustang smiled and would have shed a tear if her washer wiper fluid pump had not been lost in the accident so many months ago.

Note: It is the author's first attempt to humanize an object through fictional writing. Thank you for your constructive comments. :o)

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Of course because......

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all Texans have a horse, oil well in their back yard and a ten gallon hat. lol

You were on Drugs?! Confessional now? lol

 Hey! You were correct. I went ahead and fixed my avatar.

Cheers!


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Multiple Personality Disorder

Ooo! I thought you were talking about your horse

by Multiple Personality Disorder on Tue Nov 10, 2009 04:31 AM PST

...but now that I'm not on drugs anymore, I see that it's about your car.


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Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez

What is your meaning?

by Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez on Tue Nov 10, 2009 03:11 AM PST

MPD,

Nice little poem but you lost me with the following line:

"What do you by headlights and washer wiper fluid pump?"

 

By the way, I got the idea of humanizing my Mustang from your Sophia blog.

Thanks!


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Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez

I see.....

by Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez on Tue Nov 10, 2009 03:07 AM PST

Raton,

So you want me to write them with you in mind then. :o)

Hey! You set yourself up for it. haha

Have a great day!

Cheers!


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Multiple Personality Disorder

in order:

by Multiple Personality Disorder on Mon Nov 09, 2009 10:39 PM PST

.

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first I thought it was a woman

then I thought it was a dog

then I thought it was a car

then I thought it was a woman again

then I thought it was a car again

come to figure out it was horse

What do you by headlights and washer wiper fluid pump?


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Anonymouse

Keep d stories short & less detailed due to low attention spans!

by Anonymouse on Mon Nov 09, 2009 06:10 PM PST

Everything is sacred.


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Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez

Gotcha :o)

by Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez on Mon Nov 09, 2009 05:25 PM PST

pedro,

Thank you so much. Your reaction to my story was exactly what I was looking for.

 


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pedro

You Got me.

by pedro on Mon Nov 09, 2009 05:15 PM PST

I was sitting on the edge of my chair reading, expecting that any moment I will find out who is the kidnaper of this sad lady. Ok!! very good.


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Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez

Long time no see.......

by Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez on Mon Nov 09, 2009 02:38 PM PST

Abarmard,

 Thanks for reading my humble writings. At the moment, I am working with small pieces of fictional writing to learn to do it well. Eventually, it will be much longer and more detailed.

Cheers!

 


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Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez

Querido amigo

by Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez on Mon Nov 09, 2009 02:28 PM PST

Muchisimas gracias por vuestras palabras tan amables.

Me encantaria ser tan buena escritora como vos.

Mejores deseos para vos......

 


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Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez

Raton

by Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez on Mon Nov 09, 2009 02:17 PM PST

Honestly! Only you would turn it into something else. :o)

Tsk, tsk.

Well, at least you said it was a good piece. Thank you!

solh

 


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Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez

Merci beaucoup

by Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez on Mon Nov 09, 2009 02:15 PM PST

Monsieur Kadivar,

Vous êtes très gentil.

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Abarmard

Great

by Abarmard on Mon Nov 09, 2009 12:15 PM PST

I wish it was longer. Normally it takes me a while to get in the mood of the words.

Thanks, I enjoyed it.


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Red Wine

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by Red Wine on Mon Nov 09, 2009 09:25 AM PST

Raras veces leo cosas en ingles en este site porque el idioma no me atrae para nada,pero lo que tu escribes,me parece buena y atractiva y total me gusta...

Tienes que esribir mas y mas , la manera de que ves a las cosas,es increible, se ve claro que tienes la sangre de una buena escritora.

Sepas que te apoyo.

Que tengas suerte en todo amiga mia ...


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Anonymouse

Is the Stang getting plastic surgery?! "Better" headlights?!

by Anonymouse on Mon Nov 09, 2009 06:48 AM PST

Just kidding! Good piece.

Everything is sacred.


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Darius Kadivar

Very Creative

by Darius Kadivar on Sun Nov 08, 2009 10:39 PM PST

Nathalia You are a Gifted Writer.

Keep them coming ;0)

Warm Regards,

D


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kheyli sepaas

by Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez on Sun Nov 08, 2009 08:31 PM PST

bajenaghe naghi ,

Yes, I had to be careful not to give the story away before its time. Interesting that you thought it was about a dog.

I went back and read it. I guess you are right. It could have been easily changed to a story about a dog with the editing of some sentences.

Of course, you are correct. My first humanization (full fictional story) of an object had to be a Mustang.

 Best

 


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yolanda

......

by yolanda on Sun Nov 08, 2009 07:01 PM PST

Hi Natalia,

     Keep writing! You can turn anything into an interesting story, etc... an ordinary dolly. I am looking forward to your next piece of writing!

Take care!

Yolandida


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bajenaghe naghi

Natalia jan

by bajenaghe naghi on Sun Nov 08, 2009 06:39 PM PST

I liked and enjoyed reading your story.  Very cleverly written. At first I was sure it was a dog talking. But knowing you I should have known it was going to be car.   :-)


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.........

by Natalia Alvarado-Alvarez on Sun Nov 08, 2009 06:17 PM PST

Hi! Yolanda,

Sorry, but it was the intent of my story. I humanized my Green Mustang in an abusive relationship. She of course was saved in the end.

I have a tendency to end with happy endings. :o)

Thank you for reading my humble story.

Best

 


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yolanda

.......

by yolanda on Sun Nov 08, 2009 05:51 PM PST

Hi Natalia,

    You tricked me big time! This part fooled me big time:

“I promise you that I will never give you back to him again. He does not deserve you, my precious one. Now let us go home.”

I thought you were talking about this lady in some kind of abusive relationship....Oh My Gosh.....I am so gullible!

thank you!


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