کجا بود

کجا بود
by Orang Gholikhani
07-Mar-2011
 

بالاتر از سیاهی

رنگ چشمان تو بود

پائین تر از خدائی

سنگ و خاک و شیشه بود

در خلسه گرم تابستانی

غم مسخ دنیای تو بود

هلاک شدند زندان دریائی

ولی گنج دنیا

زیر ابروی تو بود

حسرت زمان را فرار کردی

برای این دل

که همیشه خانه تو بود

آینده را نبود باکی

بیم دنیا ز دوری تو بود

اورنگ

Mars 2011


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Anahid Hojjati

Thanks Souri jan for your answer and thanks Orang for sharing

by Anahid Hojjati on

 I have not read that much from Shamloo myself. Growinp up, I was more interested in Ebtehaj, Akhavan sales, Forough, and few others than Shamloo. Any way, it is a matter of personal preference but your answer was helpful. Thanks.

Orang jan, sorry for diversion. Thanks for sharing your poem.


Souri

Anahid

by Souri on

To me, Orang's poems are different style from yours.

He uses a more romatnic language, which is the essence of  the poetry (in my eye) and his feelings flow from his words.

As I said  before, I liked some of your poems because of the idea which was behind them (like ghabe aks, and also Arash....and some others)

But your style is mostly like writing a literary text rather than a poem.

All in all, this is a personal taste and we can not argue why we like someone's poem more than another one.

For example, I don't like Shamloo's poetry! Surprising, isn't it?

Even most of Shohrab's poems, leave me indifferent.

What can I say?

I like "shere no" but can't accept  just any speech  as a "sher e no". I had said the same thing to our dear Mehman, after I had read the last two poems which he has posted here. While I had always admired his style until then.


Hope this short explanation was enough for you.

Friendly;


Anahid Hojjati

Souri jan,

by Anahid Hojjati on

I am kind of curious. Orang's poems are in same style as mine but you calld mine not even poems and his are always excellent. why is that?


Orang Gholikhani

Souri jan thanks

by Orang Gholikhani on

Your comments are always warming my poems.

Ghorbanat

Orang


Souri

حسرت زمان را فرار کردی

Souri


Another beautiful poem, again!

Lovely !

I truly enjoyed it, Orang jon.

thanks for sharing.