The Newlyweds (8)

Jaleho

Right again.  I was thinking after I wrote my little character analyis' that it might affect dear Laleh's future story line.  That would totally spoil the fun!

So let's focus on the current effects and see what unfolds!

Kourosh... you seem to imply there was a previous post which was deleted?  Was it your post or someone else's?  Either way, I remain curious as to why you think I hate men.  Thanks!

Jaleh Jan right again!

I usually do not make comments while the series is developing because of the exact reason you state.  In this case, the response has been so overwhelming that I could not help but to engage.  But I am revealing too miuch and taking the fun out so from now on mum's the word :)

Nel:  Thank you for your enthusiasm.  It is amazing how people have responded to these characters.  The readers are taking them in these vastly different directions.  The whole thing is so amazing to me.  Your plot is quite intriguing.  I think you have a series of your own simmering somewhere inside.  I would love to read it one day!

Dear Laleh

You're toooooo nice pandering to everyone's curiosity!

I think you're creating intresting, complex, yet very real characters who amazingly satisfy everyone's hidden desire in psychoanalysis, even those who say the story is getting boring because they can guess all the way to the end and they know all the characters already!

So, let everyone keep on guessing without you helping them! You're doing a bit of your own Agatha Christie thingie, doooooon't :-) The fun in Agatha Christie was the guessing the murderer who would always be the person you least expected. Granted, after few of them, one could pretty much eleminate all the obvious ones and have a good guess at the real one. But, she could still manage to throw a curve ball at you!

Be less kind, let us fight.

Thanks Laleh for

Thanks Laleh for entertaining us

just a few notes: Pejman needs to be manned-up, I mean he comes thru as khaleh-zanak, overly-sensitive and boring, as men express themselves in deeds rather than words, we need to see him get out and interact with people and have another life instead of playing house with Nassim and Co. all the time.

You said he's artistic, wouldn't be a bad idea to send him to some artsy fartsy circles, where he displays a totally different side, possibly trying to market his talent and in the meantime get involved with some vixen of a gallery owner. I'd like to see him cutting a few corners to stop living off his in-laws, nothing criminal of course but taking risks.
I wouldn't go down the boring path of pushing him into Katie's arms, Katie could be the silent onlooker for a while, knowing all about his other life but rejoicing in her previledged knowledge and planning to use it in due time if Nassim insists on playing domineering mom to her and rubbing her nose in her happily-married life.

As for Nassim, she needs a rude awakening. Oh, I so know the type, goody-two-shoes, pampered, self-righetous, whom everybody sees as a nice girl, who increasingly turn into their mothers as they age especially after marriage
the ones who refer to making love as "barnameh" and "rabeteh"!

I am playing nice:)

Laleh

Despite what it may seem, It was never my intention to purposefully rattle her for any personal reasons for that matter. they have not put my previous posting up here yet, That is where i mentioned why i thought so.

Very Interesting point about Nassim

To tell you the truth, she is my least favorite character and perhaps the one I judge too harshly even though i try not to judge these characters and let them be.  I have done my best not to write these characters as good guys versus bad guys or bad men versus good women etc.  Nassim can be viewed by some as a "long suffering wife" character but I think there is more to it.  She is so in love with this very superficial "idea" of happiness, throwing a fantastic wedding reception, having a good looking, educated, well-mannered husband, living in a nice house, keeping "aberoo" in front of Mr. and Mrs. So and So, I don't think she has really made any effort to know Pejman deep down or to question his motives.  She is just happy living in this cocoon where everything is perfect so that when even the most minor disagreement arises, she goes into a nuclear meltdown.  I think there is a lot of wilful blindness and passive aggressiveness in her (her attitude towards her own sister).  Of course, all the characters have this in common in this story in that they do not make the effort to reach beyond their own personal needs (i.e. what am I getting out of this marriage?) and to try to understand and/or fulfill the needs of the other person.  They are all leading separate lives within the marriage.  It is a very sad state and I have seen it too often.

Regarding AW, I didn't see anything in her comments that would indicate she "hates all men."  It seems to be a gross exxageration at best and an attempt to rattle her for whatever personal reason.  Please play nice :-)

kouroush

Hate men?  How absolutely absurd.  It's true I do worship my husband.  (I hope he's reading this.  Baby baby.... I loooooove you...:-)

Many of my best friends have been male.  I have always related to men better.  My dad is my idol.  My son is my life.  I have two wonderful step-sons.  I've got a twin brother for God's sake...:-0.

No, if you hear me say anything about "typical male", it's because it IS typical. Perhaps I have a better insight to men than most women.  Perhaps you're feeling a little... hmmm, quilty...;-)

No dude... don't go there.  I'm just teasing you.  Other than saying "typical" when it applies to something a man said or did, please point out where I've been hostile towards a male poster.  I'd really like to know how or why you'd think that.

I would like to point out that you seem to apply double standards here... I say typical and you seem to think he's a paragon of virtue and then go right into a lashing of Nassim.

Let's discuss this... Pejman versus Nassim.  But let's be nice... ok?  I promise I will if you promise you will.  A debate or discussion doesn't have to be an attack.  It's simply too tiring and it's a beautiful Friday and I don't want to attract the "uglies".  So if you want to have a simple little talk, let's do!

Are you making fun of my southern accent...... y'all.....:-)

Wise Katie

This will be a big surprise for all in here. I know it. Katie will nothave that juicy affair, that everybody is waiting for with Pejman, even though all the signs are pointing in that direction. she willl wise up, starts listening and understanding what her mom and sis tell her, and more importantly she will quite smoking:) Good story Laleh khanoom:)

American wife

Why do you hate men so much? well, maybe not all men but at least some of them. Seems to me that you worship your husband! But i see that in this posting and also your other comments that such and such are "typical of men"!
Here in this fictional story, I don't think pejman is doing anything wrong at all.
He is being a very decent husband, Trying to be a big brother, and calls things the way he sees them.
On the contrary, i think this nassim banoo is a bit of a control freak and overly emotional that once things get rough and she realizes what she has done, tears will fall and all of a sudden begs for forgiveness. Kinda Reminds me of Carrie Character in Sex and the City!!

Good day Ya'all.

Dear AW

This reminds me when I was into Agatha Christie and it was just too nail biting so I woul often skip to the last two pages where Miss Marple or Hercule Poirot would triumphantly unmask the murderer, then go back to the beginning or middle of the book, wherever it was I had left off, and peacefully read the rest.  Saying that you want to read the last page of my story ispaying a big compliment!!! Thank you for your words of support and your continued interest.

Jaleho

You are so right on!  I saw this coming from miles away.  Poor Pejman is going to have an affair with the poor Kati and guess who's fault it's going to be!!!!!  Certainly not his... because nothing is EVER his fault. 

Just wanna smack him upside the head.

Laleh... can't wait to hear more from Firoozeh too.  I know you have to space it out but she's looking pretty interesting.  Are we going to hear from Nassim?  I'd like to hear her version of poor Kati. 

Ok... never mind.  Nothing worse than someone wanting to go to the last page first....:-)

Thank you Jaleho

that was a very good interpretation.  and very funny too :) there are some people who are born never satisfied with whatever they have got.  They will only see the glass half empty.  Though Pejman is not all that bad, just... Well, I don't want to get ahead of myself and give away more of the story.  But I just couldn't help it, that was so funny!

To the rest: Sorry that you were bored, honestly! Hope you still give this a chance and see how it turns out.

Ahhh... poor self-declared hero....

"The whole reason why I am in this hell right now is because I want to give her the illusion that I am happy, that all is well in the Great White North. That she does not have to worry anymore about her hapless Pejman. And then you go and ask her about Kati’s history!!!"

Such a self sacrificing mama's good boy!  Sacrifices himself by being a "damad sar khaneh" and getting a good job without having the merits...all for mama's sake!!  But now that he wanted to be even more of a sacrificial lamb saving the life of poor little kitty Kati the BIG BROTHER pisses on his parade, awe :-(

Good one Laleh, very nice!

rest of the story

lemme guess, the husband and sister in law, get it on and run away together and the poor fat ugly sister ends up alone, miserable & humiliated , until she wins the lottery and starts getting pummeled with online proposals?!!

Getting boring!!

The story started really well, but unfortunately its getting boring now, specially Part 8. Hope the next episode will be juicer. Looking forward to read the rest.